The Borders of Darkness

Member Posts : 75 Join date : 2013-11-04

The Borders of Darkness

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Title: The Borders of Darkness

Alias: The Borders

Allowed here: Only Zetas and guards

Subject: Re: The Borders of Darkness Fri Nov 08, 2013 5:47 pm

The demoness lifted her muzzle as her nostrails flared, the atmosphere still held glentle and slow falling snow flakes. The landscape now held about an inch of snow, her auds swerved as she listened. The birds chirping annoyed her, if she didn't iggnore them they would drive her insane. However hard the demoness tried she couldn't block them out so she began to snap and bark at them, sending them scattered into the air. Shaking her pelt free of snow once again she observed everything making sure nothing would slip by her.

Appendages began to slowly move her forward, banner followed closely behind signaling to everything that she would attack without hesitation. Green optics would quickly blink, so fast you could barely tell she had blinked. Soon a white cloud of carbon ecaped her nostrials in a deep exhale. Auds perked once more, swerved at all the sound. Her optics narrowed into slits as she spotted something.

Rose's movements where flawless as she moved gracefully toward what she had spotted, if one was not paying attenchine to her posture they would not know that she was still in attacking postiton. Her red stained paws of black where soon a blur as her movements quicked into a jog. The demoness then began to slow and soon stoped, her white fur as white as the snow, shined, showing how heathly she was. Rose grunted with disapointment when she realized what she thought she had saw was a hare who had just dove into it's hole. The demoness could have sworen she had seen a wolf.

Word Count: 263
Spoken To:None
Wolves Mentioned:None

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-The tress passer, almost got caught by the guard, He was a curious beast, with black fur, This female was very alert, so he would need everything to get past this fea, into this territory, to cause bad happenings, So his black fur perfectly blended in the shadows, of his trees that surrounded him, Now he tried to move past the female, the only thing that bothered the tress-passer was his scent, so he was quick, but not quick enough to make noise-

Subject: Re: The Borders of Darkness Fri Nov 08, 2013 9:57 pm

The demoness lifted her nape to see something that looked like a shadow. Optics narrowed and the scent was carried to her, she also noticed some paw prints in the snow, which where slowly being covered. Rose followed the prints on alert, then she saw the wolf. Her lips folded back revealing her sharp canines, ears alert, and fur brizzling, making her look now the size of a large male. "What the hell are you doing here?!" Rose spat out the words as dark and violent as a snake.

(So short ;-;...not sure if I can curse but oh well xD it suits her)

Word Count: 89
Spoken To: The Loner
Wolves Mentioned: The Loner

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-He froze hearing, paw-steps, and a threatening voice, He growled, before curling his lips in a snarl- "Who wants to know?" And isn't it strange that your guarding a border? Some weak pack you have"

Subject: Re: The Borders of Darkness Fri Nov 08, 2013 10:13 pm

The demoness felt nothing as he threw the remark at her, instead she simply had a crazed laugh. Then she spat, "Weak? Ha! You call us weak, when when you try and raid our pack. Tipical tresspassers! Know enough talk! Show me what your words are backed up by! Or you can simply run on to another pack and be a parasitic peast there!"

Word Count: 64
Spoken To: The Loner
Wolves Mentioned: The Loner

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-He growled low at the female- "Your words do not phase me, Female! Call me a Tress Passer if you may, call me anything that comes to your weak mind! Ill show you what being a loner has paid off!" -With his words stated, He attacked. Attacking her in her blind spot, before she could even notice, His jaws was already locked around her neck, slowly sinking his fangs deep-

Subject: Power-Play Sat Nov 09, 2013 1:50 pm

Wolfen wrote:: -He growled low at the female- "Your words do not phase me, Female! Call me a Tress Passer if you may, call me anything that comes to your weak mind! Ill show you what being a loner has paid off!" -With his words stated, He attacked. Attacking her in her blind spot, before she could even notice, His jaws was already locked around her neck, slowly sinking his fangs deep-

You might not know but "Power-Playing" is not allowed here. Where did you go wrong and power-play? I know many people get confused on power-play and most don't even know what it is so you shouldn't get angry or ashamed.

Wolfen wrote:: Attacking her in her blind spot, before she could even notice, His jaws was already locked around her neck, slowly sinking his fangs deep-

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When you said these words there where power-play. You cannot attack a wolf without letting it "reply" in post. If this where a real fight I'm sure he would have missed, wouldn't have "locked" his fangs, or stick his fangs deep.

(I have to go so I will explain more later sorry!)

Member Posts : 75 Join date : 2013-11-04

O.o.... i was power-playing...

Subject: Re: The Borders of Darkness Sun Nov 10, 2013 2:17 pm

Yes ;P You have to let the wolf reply or have a chance at the move.
For Ex:
Bites fangs deep inside the wolf. (Power-play)

You could have said this,
EX:
Tries to latch onto the neck of the wolf.

Key Words to use:
Tires
Try
Aim

You cannot use anything like "Makes her bleed", "Makes Her Cry out in pain" or anything like that. You cannot make the wolf do anything.

Which you didn't do.
I hope you get it more now. If not look up poweplaying. I am not so good of an explainer xD but I do know what it is.